Narrative Writing

For writing we have been doing a narrative based off a fairy tale. My narrative is based off of 'The Little Train That Could' but instead it is called 'The Little Dragon Who Could'. So far we have decided the characters and their names, the title and the first paragraph. Here is mine so far:

The Little Dragon Who Could

Welcome to a world from a kids imagination, it’ll give you a good sensation. One with dragons and

letters and mail galore, So much so that it will make your eyes sore. This story takes place in a great big,

windy canyon, with a dragon getting shot out of a cannon. This little dragon was named Mimi, and she

was quite cute if you ask me. Her wings were small and it was hard to fly, she flapped her wings both

hard and fast she could come to do it if she’d try. “Mimi I need your help,” yelled mailman one day,

“What for,” Mimi asked in dismay. “To fly to the city and deliver mail,” he said in reply, “NO!” she

shouted, “I CAN’T EVEN FLY.”